I am continually amazed at how good you are at EVERY thing you do...in school, lol! I find you writing style fresh, interesting, easy to read, and sometimes quite amusing.
Your editing needs a little improvement; I think you would do well to have another pair of eyes critique your work before you submit the final copy (hint, hint), as there were a few grammatical errors.
Word choice is an important element of voice and style...and it also allows the author to more succinctly convey a meaning or description. Work on building your vocabulary and make good use of your Thesaurus.
A few of the pieces seem to have been written in a rush. Take pride in your work and allot sufficient time to produce a good piece (perhaps you should devote LESS time/effort to playing League). I look forward to your future endeavors!
By the way...loved the title...it's SO apropos! Bon nuit ma petite chou! Fin.
I just looked over my comments from your Freshman project and found the same things to be true this time around. I could have copied and pasted!
What did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
I'm still amazed at your ability, you truly are an accomplished young woman AND an excellent student; I'm very proud of you and you should be proud of yourself as well. I think the best part of your writing s the voice with which you write. I would like to see you improve your organization, transitions...and your proof-reading.
Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
Voice...definitely.
Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?
I am continually amazed at how good you are at EVERY thing you do...in school, lol! I find you writing style fresh, interesting, easy to read, and sometimes quite amusing.
ReplyDeleteYour editing needs a little improvement; I think you would do well to have another pair of eyes critique your work before you submit the final copy (hint, hint), as there were a few grammatical errors.
Word choice is an important element of voice and style...and it also allows the author to more succinctly convey a meaning or description. Work on building your vocabulary and make good use of your Thesaurus.
A few of the pieces seem to have been written in a rush. Take pride in your work and allot sufficient time to produce a good piece (perhaps you should devote LESS time/effort to playing League). I look forward to your future endeavors!
By the way...loved the title...it's SO apropos! Bon nuit ma petite chou! Fin.
I just looked over my comments from your Freshman project and found the same things to be true this time around. I could have copied and pasted!
ReplyDeleteWhat did you like about my portfolio and sharing and what would you like to see me improve on?
I'm still amazed at your ability, you truly are an accomplished young woman AND an excellent student; I'm very proud of you and you should be proud of yourself as well. I think the best part of your writing s the voice with which you write. I would like to see you improve your organization, transitions...and your proof-reading.
Which of the writing traits (ideas, organization, voice, word choice) do you feel was most successful for me?
Voice...definitely.
Which of the traits of writing would you like me to improve on in the coming semester?
Organization and word choice...AND proofreading.
Okay! C'est toute...